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复习指导高考英语书面表达书信和通知辅导(一)

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  高考英语书面表达书信和通知辅导   【题例一】 书面表达:(NMET1999)   假设你是李华,在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友Smith 先生的来信。他三年前参观过你校,   听说现在变化很大,希望了解有关情况。参照下图(图片无法显示,见《高考纠错本 英语》一书,下同),给他写一封回信,介绍你校的变化。   注意:1.回信须包括图画的主要内容,可以适当增减细节,使内容连贯。   2.词数100左右。   Dear Mr Smith,   I’m glad to receive your letter.①Yes,you’re right,in the past three years great changes happened in my school.   There ②is only one school building in my school three years ago,but now,there is another new building ③at the east of our school and a library ④at the weast ⑤where used to be my playground.The new playground is built ⑥ out of my school age.⑦So my school becomes larger than before.Also around my school there are lots of trees which are planted by ourselves.   ⑧Now,my school becomes large and beautiful.I hope some day you can come to my school.⑨We’ll welcome you!   Best wishes,   Yours,   Li Hua   【误点及纠错】   1.短语句子不符习惯   【纠错】本文要点基本齐全,但在表达中有些层次不清,且有多处语法和用法不当的错误.   ① 第二句话Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes happened in my school.中,有用词搭配错误,change 不能与happen一起使用,happen应改为take place,而且此处时态应该用完成时和时间状语in the past three years呼应。改后的句子为:Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes have taken place in my school.② 第二段第一句中is 应改为was.③ at the east of our school 应改为 in the east of our school.④ at the weast应改为 in the west, weast 是拼写错误。⑥ age是明显的拼写错误,应该是gate,这种错误应尽量避免;out of my school gate 指的是大门外,不妥。把out of 改成in front of 或outside较好。   ⑧ Now, my school becomes large and beautiful这句话可改为:Now, my school become more and more beautiful.理由同⑦。⑨We’ll welcome you ! 应改为:You are welcome!   又如“题例二” ③ get to 是固定词组。⑤write down是固定词组,意为“记下”。⑥“在吃午饭时”,应用介词短语。⑧“to one’s joy”是固定词组,意为“令某人高兴 的是。” ⑨another意为“又一”。   又如“题例三” ①raise 相当于lift,指把某物位置升高;improve相当于become better,意为“改进;提高”。⑤按英语习惯,表达“欢迎某人做某事”时,经常把welcome用作形容词。   又如“题例四”⑦can’t常用来表示“能力;可能性”,此处最好用shouldn’t。   2.上下文缺乏逻辑   【纠错】⑤ where used to be my playground 中存在逻辑错误,应改为:where our old playground used to be .   3.结论不当   【纠错】⑦ So my school becomes larger than before 这个结论不太恰当,学校不会因为操场的迁出而变大,况且在原操场处又建了图书馆,这句话应去掉。   参考范文:   Dear Mr Smith,   I was so pleased to hear from you and am writing to tell you something about my school. You are right. Quite a few changes have taken place. On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the playground used to be now stands another new building---our library. In it there are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in front of the school. We have also planted a lot of trees in and around the school. I hope you come and see for yourself some day.   Best wishes,   Yours,   Li Hua   【题例二】书面表达:   用日记形式记一次有意义的旅行。   提示:1.时间:2000年4月16日,星期天;2.天气:晴;3.人员:你班全体人员;4.地点:森林(乘车两小时到达);5.活动内容:记录看到的动植物,野餐,检验河水,看看是否有污染。   要求:词数不少于100词。   习作:   Sunday, April 16,2000 Fine   This Sunday(Today①) our class organized a trip to a forest. We went by bus and it takes(took②)us two hours to get to③) the forest. When we arrived, we walked   through the forest separately. While we were walking, we (we④) recorded all the wildlife and plants we could see in the forest (as we walked).When we found an unknown plant, we wrote (it down⑤) in our notebooks.   Lunch(At lunch⑥) time we made a fire in the open and cooked the meal over it. After lunch, we came to a river and tested the water to see if it was polluting(ed⑦).Late in the afternoon we returned. In(To our⑧) joy, we not only learned about some wildlife and plants, but also enjoyed ourselves very much. I hope I’ll have other(another⑨) chance to go out for a more interesting outing.   4.时间状语误用   【纠错】①日记记述的是当天发生的事情,故此处状语使用“Today”更准确。   5.时态误用   【纠错】②日记多用过去时,与上下文时态一致。   6.缺乏句子间的连接成分   【纠错】④此处用as引导状语从句,意为“一边……一边”。   7.时态和语态误用   【纠错】⑦“检查河水是否受到污染”,从句中应用被动语态。 高考英语书面表达书信和通知辅导   【题例一】 书面表达:(NMET1999)   假设你是李华,在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友Smith 先生的来信。他三年前参观过你校,   听说现在变化很大,希望了解有关情况。参照下图(图片无法显示,见《高考纠错本 英语》一书,下同),给他写一封回信,介绍你校的变化。   注意:1.回信须包括图画的主要内容,可以适当增减细节,使内容连贯。   2.词数100左右。   Dear Mr Smith,   I’m glad to receive your letter.①Yes,you’re right,in the past three years great changes happened in my school.   There ②is only one school building in my school three years ago,but now,there is another new building ③at the east of our school and a library ④at the weast ⑤where used to be my playground.The new playground is built ⑥ out of my school age.⑦So my school becomes larger than before.Also around my school there are lots of trees which are planted by ourselves.   ⑧Now,my school becomes large and beautiful.I hope some day you can come to my school.⑨We’ll welcome you!   Best wishes,   Yours,   Li Hua   【误点及纠错】   1.短语句子不符习惯   【纠错】本文要点基本齐全,但在表达中有些层次不清,且有多处语法和用法不当的错误.   ① 第二句话Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes happened in my school.中,有用词搭配错误,change 不能与happen一起使用,happen应改为take place,而且此处时态应该用完成时和时间状语in the past three years呼应。改后的句子为:Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes have taken place in my school.② 第二段第一句中is 应改为was.③ at the east of our school 应改为 in the east of our school.④ at the weast应改为 in the west, weast 是拼写错误。⑥ age是明显的拼写错误,应该是gate,这种错误应尽量避免;out of my school gate 指的是大门外,不妥。把out of 改成in front of 或outside较好。   ⑧ Now, my school becomes large and beautiful这句话可改为:Now, my school become more and more beautiful.理由同⑦。⑨We’ll welcome you ! 应改为:You are welcome!   又如“题例二” ③ get to 是固定词组。⑤write down是固定词组,意为“记下”。⑥“在吃午饭时”,应用介词短语。⑧“to one’s joy”是固定词组,意为“令某人高兴
 
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